Wednesday, May 05, 2010

haiku double...


one idea blooms
stirs the imagination
becomes a garden.

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but a single rose
may fill the eye with beauty
more than a bouquet.

10 comments:

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Hey! Two haikus I like!

(Maybe two comments too. Google ate the first one with an error message. It may regurgitate it later.)

J Cosmo Newbery said...

It did!

Jean said...

Ha!...I like 'em all, gonna leave as is d:-)

boneman said...

it's the distance factor, no doubt.
And the Earth is spinning Easterly, so, there's a delay there.

the walking man said...

Like the contrast in perspectives offered jean.

Jean said...

Fighting centrifugal force or gravity, perhaps?


Thank you, Mark. Obviously, we can make words say anything we want.

Joan of Argghh! said...

I meant to comment on these as a fine example of the traditional haiku.

All too often the natural beauty and the resolving last line are left in the pitch and yaw of amateurs.

These are so lovely and would sit prettily on a cup, in a framed art, a mini-easel. . .

Jean said...

Your critique means a lot, Joan.
Really. Thank you.
I kinda liked 'em, too ;-)

kdzu said...

I'd classify these two more as a home run rather than only a double. And no stolen bases. A solid hit to center and a trot around the diamond.

Jean said...

Ha!...what a great compliment, Larry.
thank you :-)